April 10, 2006
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Bird and Lil Play on IM Again
Here's part of a longer bird and lil poem, taken from one of our trading words or phrases one at a time IM's last week.
The first tthree lines are bird's, the next three are mine, then we continue to alternate...
Moving
In time's
delegated spaces,
Leaving
Fermenting
Sweet and lonely traces
Folding and scolding
In upon themselves
Like haiku,
I find you
pearlbamboo
copyright e.p. hodges
Comments (3)
I find Bird and your poetry very clever. It is difficult to write shared poetry, but always so much fun.
Always so interesting. Dave is who? I have been away too long.
Oh, I like this poem! "Moving in time's delegated spaces" set the image in mind for me of a picture I like called 'Nude Descending a Staircase' by Duchamp . . . so that the "spaces" talked about in the poem did fold in upon themselves. Hmmmm . . . well anyway, I'm not making this very clear. Suffice it to say I'm a very visually oriented person and I saw your poem in that way and it was pleasing . . .
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